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I want to write a book
full of Life's Tales.
About the meaning of it all
the truth we stole
and buried beneath our feet.

Just to speak of redemption
through the pain.
In every step there's
wisdom to gain.
And for all that I'll ever be,
the search will always be
                             the key.
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Written 13 years ago, at age 16.

Check journal entry date: 7/11
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~tyler9862 Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I saw this on the journal and loved the wording!
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~LikeDustIllRise Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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~tyler9862 Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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~Missdelayingit Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice poem. You have a good idea, but I think by using end rhyme your words came out very cliche. It restricts your writing, but good job
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~LikeDustIllRise Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for your input Miss! I have to say, this one's written at 16. It's just a piece I copied from my journal entry today.
But I see what you mean by restriction. This is a fact.
This poem, as many others, were a learning process and it's good for me to see the road I took. Should you perhaps read the journal, you'd maybe see where this is coming from.
Thanks for reading! :)
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~Missdelayingit Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, I see. I'll be sure to check out your journal
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!Shatyoki Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Jij bent de beste ooit!
:love:
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~LikeDustIllRise Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha that's so sweet! Google translate? :p Thanks Shat!
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!Shatyoki Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: yes, yes...and I'm keen on really learning a few phrases too... :)

And you're giving me names after names... :D

Shatyo, Shat... :love:

Well, my friends call me Saty too...in case you're curious... :P

And my nick name's "Pappu" [like pup-poo]

:rofl: :lmao: :giggle:
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~LikeDustIllRise Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Shat means hunny it dutch ;)

What does pup-poo stand for then?
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